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Rilnian
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Had an idea late at night, when most of my ideas are though up. Scribbled it down on my notebook and decided to post it up here. Wondering if it could go somewhere.

I hadn’t left that light on had I? Oh, what difference does it make? I should be asleep by now. I suppose I had left it open.

But what is that light. I hadn’t left that light on had I? What a crazy old man I am, I’m sure I did, first the door, then the light. Did I leave that door open? No matter, time for bed, I need my rest.

Now what is the noise? I don’t suppose I’m making that myself. What an interesting concept, but one I most certainly must explore later. No time for thinking, only time for sleep. Well there it is again. Where did that noise come from?

Edit: Title was supposed to be "The Danger of Insanity"... dont know what I was thinking...
Thank you all!


[This message has been edited by Rilnian (edited June 28, 2006).]

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kings_falcon
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It reads like something you jotted down when you woke up. Other than someone is rambling, I have no idea what is going on. Any idea can "go somewhere" but you need a clear vision of where before the story can follow.

What are you trying to say?
Where are we?
Who is the "I?"
What is going on?
Why should I care?

If you can answer those questions, you can start taking this "somewhere." It could be that you use this text but not as an opening. Try to flesh out the story you want to tell and then incorporating this somewhere will make sense.

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Neoindra
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Do you remember anymore of the plot of the dream? Why is it important that an old man is confused and tired? I think that this can go somewhere, but you would have to get a good hook and figure out how this episode fits into a larger story. Oh and ditto Kings_Falcon I wouldn’t open with this, it’s too confusing.
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morningstar
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I liked it. It made me think of Dustin Hoffman from Rainman. It made me interested to know what the "light was.
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Kathleen Dalton Woodbury
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I just changed the title and then noticed that you said "The Danger of Instantity" (meaning instant-ness?), or is that also a typo?

If you want it to be "Instantity," please let me know and I'll fix it again.

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Rilnian
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No you have it right. Thank you!
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