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Robyn_Hood
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I'm looking for a final round of crits on my utricide flash. Basically I want to make there isn't anything glaring that should be changed -- I am not looking to overhaul it.

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Freddy Krueger Conquers the Scot
Words: 980
Genre: Dark Humour
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There are I times I get angry. Real angry. But to my credit, I’ve never done anything I might regret in the morning. I mean, it isn’t like I’ve killed anyone – yet. My new neighbour has me re-evaluating my position on frivolous, justifiable homicide.

Consider this. Every morning I get up and go to work. It’s early and I’m not a morning person. I don’t drink coffee and Coke just burns in my stomach if I drink it too early. So it is best if people just leave me alone until at least nine o’clock. I don’t think that’s asking too much. Finally, the weekend comes and I can sleep in. Finally, after five days of pre-dawn hell, I get a reprieve, a day where I can relax and get the sleep I need to recharge my batteries. It keeps me sane.


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JOHN
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johnlewisjr89@gmail.com

I'll take a look at it. I owe you a couple anyway.


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wbriggs
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I'll read.
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LMermaid
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I'm intrigued by both the opening and the title. I'd like to read the whole thing.
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You have a good voice. I was hooked enough to keep reading past the 13th line to be sure.
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