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I know that we rarely look at poetry, but I would greatly appreciate some feedback on a work I've done recently. The thing as a whole is ~20 lines, so I'll just give the first one. The work also contains a few swearwords, but nothing done for self-indulgent reasons; the swearwords are there because they need to be, in my honest opinion as the creator.
If you are interested, please inform me, and I shall email the entirety to you.
Thank you.
quote: Summer is sick, and it hacks up a stench
[This message has been edited by Phanto (edited May 29, 2005).]
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Just wanted to let you know that your first line is very effective! I read that as summer being a season, not someone or some thing's name, yes?
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