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It would help US a great deal if you kept all these revisions in a single thread. You have three separate threads going now, and we have no clue which one is the one you want feedback on.
My advice: pick one and put ALL revisions in that post. Then go back to the other two and delete your text, and reference people to your chosen post.
After a day or so, the unused posts will sink to the bottom of the pond, and you'll be left with the primary post.