My name is kardina. Small 'k!' If you can't tell I'm enjoying every minute of this, you don't know squat. My age is none of your business. My reason for being here is you won't let me go. My next job is gone, now, thanks to you.
Get on with it.
And what is your job?
So why are you here again? What crime did you do?
I need to get through this case so I can go home. So tell me what I need to know and we both can leave...at least I can.
I don't give a good righteous you gotta go home. So it's ok I stay for no reason and you don't have to? You stopped me. You took my papers! You say I jumped the greaseman! You say I took his card and his credits and this thing called the Auger! You say I got reason!
I got no reason! I never saw the griddler before, ever! If I got his card and his credits, where are they? Where's this Auger thing? You got all my stuff. What am I supposed to have done with them? I gotta fly! I gotta trade or I get behind. You keep me and I got a mark against me. I got enough marks, you put me down for good!
[This message has been edited by btharvey (edited May 09, 2011).]
Remember I work under someone, and with others who don't always do what they are suppose to, so I'm in the dark here too.
Now, do you have any family, friends, bartenders, etc. who can vouch for you?
All I know is we're walking to the ship 'cause we got the Go-call, and someone skanks me. I wake up, Jed's not there, this griddler's skanked on the ground next to me, and you Keepers are runnin' down the passage at me! Then he's screaming I took his card and credits, and he starts shaking me yelling he wants his Auger back what did I do with it!
You P-boys take my papers, shove me in the room, and leave me there, [tears start streaming down her face] my ship goes, I got no Jed, no creds, no papers, nowhere!
Why?
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Got no family. Got no friends -- they on my ship that took. Don't got enough scratch to hang in bars, got a hard enough time getting food don't need to be loopy.
All I know is we're walking to the ship 'cause we got the Go-call, and someone skanks me. I wake up, Jed's not there, this griddler's skanked on the ground next to me, and you Keepers are runnin' down the passage at me! Then he's screaming I took his card and credits, and he starts shaking me yelling he wants his Auger back what did I do with it!You P-boys take my papers, shove me in the room, and leave me there, [tears start streaming down her face] my ship goes, I got no Jed, no creds, no papers, nowhere!
Why?
Now we are getting some where. But first any record? And who is Jed? How long you have you known him?
(A long thoughtful pause)
You wouldn't be the first one, no family, no connections, to be served up on platter for a replacement
(another thoughtful pause)
but than again it wouldn't be the first time a..."P-boy" was played either.
What am I gonna do? [crying, burrowing her head in her arms] Don't got nothing! Nobody miss me! Nowhere to be! No papers! No creds!
Please!
*** Author's Note: I've personally tried to do this in the past, but I think that nothing is as good as an interactive session with different people to refine the character and the situation a character is in. We can stop this one here, as I have a really good picture of who she is, was, what's she's doing, where she belongs, doesn't, etc. Many thanks to all! This may be the best way for me to start stories yet!
Of course, no one can beat Isaac Asimov's "Silly Asses," which he wrote up while sitting outside his editor's office, waiting for an appointment.
Thanks all! Look for more characters to come! Same and different universes.
But was she faking it? She sure went from smart aleck to crying real fast. But either way that could be an interesting story plot. As long as she doesn't cry too much.
She really was crying because she can't take care of herself -- not emotionally, anyway. If you ever saw an NCIS episode where Tony and his girlfriend doctor are in the basement of her hospital, and the man and woman are looking for her brother who swallowed the cocaine ... this helplessnes is a lot like the girl's helplessness, only not based on being a junkie.
I really like the idea of playing out the characters ... it creates a situation, which helps create the environment and the universe. The slang I just threw out, 'cause she wouldn't use the regular words in her experience, though she knew them. P-boy --- protector. cop. Able-bodied starman. Griddler/greaseman ... short-order cook. Etc.
The 'Auger' was the 'great big thing that everyone's after.' Like the Maltese Falcon. Haven't decided what it does yet, but I will. Anyway, thanks! I'll try to do the same for you!