Hatrack River Writers Workshop: First 13 lines

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Posted by PB&Jenny (Member # 9200) on :

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[This message has been edited by PB&Jenny (edited December 24, 2010).]

Posted by walexander (Member # 9151) on :

PBJ,

It's kind of short, but it drives straight to the point.

For a one word story it's pretty good. It has a certain finality to it but leaves you wondering if there is going to be a part two.

Posted by LDWriter2 (Member # 9148) on :

I agree with W.

Good thing he beat me to it though.

It's refreshingly concise, leaving something to the imagination of the reader yet it still says something.

I also wonder if there will be a part two.

Maybe it could be sent to a Twitter magazine.

Hmmm, seriously it gives me an idea for a twitter story of my own.

Posted by LDWriter2 (Member # 9148) on :

Sorry for taking PB and J's thread I hope he gets his story up soon.

Did it. Wrote a Twitter story. Decided to make it a Christmas tale.

But I can't post it on hatrack...it's seven lines so I can't post the first 13.

Posted by PB&Jenny (Member # 9200) on :

ROFLMAO !!!!

Thanks guys, that was the best Christmas present. Well, no. The second best.

Sorry about the deletion. I was going to ask for a critique on a new story, but I decided to enter it in the 'Inhuman' challenge. Hopefully I get the same kind of reviews.

You guys are the greatest.