I'm looking for readers. This is SciFi/Horror--about 3500 words.
Old Friends Never Die
There is no such thing as a mad scientist...right? They are just Hollywood creations developed for your entertainment. No one is that cracked--that driven to insane feats of science for the sake of...what? Revenge? Status? To prove that they are better than their peers? Sure, mad scientists are just a story--the imaginings of a creative mind--at least that's what I used to think.
I had it all: a thriving practice, a beautiful wife, and more money than I could shake a stick at. So why did I answer the call from my old high school buddy? I hadn't seen the guy in ten years, and out of the blue I get a phone call, in the middle of rush-hour traffic no less.
"Hello." I swerved to miss an idiot doing forty-five in the left
[This message has been edited by Kathleen Dalton Woodbury (edited February 10, 2006).]
Posted by pixydust (Member # 2311) on :
I'll read.
Posted by x__sockeh__x (Member # 3069) on :
I'll read - sounds good so far. Posted by LMermaid (Member # 2778) on :
I'll read! I'm intrigued--plus, I owe you some crits.
Posted by Dude (Member # 1957) on :
Thanks for the offers. It should be on the way.
Posted by Ray (Member # 2415) on :
I'll take a look too.
Posted by Dude (Member # 1957) on :
Thanks Ray. It's on the way.
Posted by trousercuit (Member # 3235) on :
Careful of "You Can't Fire Me, I Quit." The beginning sounds like "It really happened! I swear!" But suspension of disbelief is a reader's default attitude when going in. You could probably hook us with something less defensive-sounding.
Unless you mean for us to disbelieve the narrator, that is. That'd be fun.
quote:I had it all: a thriving practice, a beautiful wife, and more money than I could shake a stick at. So why did I answer the call from my old high school buddy?
I'd answer a call from an old high-school buddy no matter what. Maybe this buddy was unsettling in high school, and the narrator never really liked him instead?
Why would someone shake a stick at money?
EDIT: Oh, and I'd like to read it. af_haste at hotmail dot com.
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Posted by pixydust (Member # 2311) on :
Sorry that I haven't gotten to you yet. I'm going to go over it tonight, so I should have your critique by Sunday.
Thanks for being patient.
Posted by Dude (Member # 1957) on :
No hurry pixydust. trousercuit, it is on the way.
Thanks.
Posted by trousercuit (Member # 3235) on :
Glad you told me. Hotmail marked it as junk, for heck's sake.
I've never critiqued before. If I somehow end up sounding snippy, it's not intended at all.
Posted by trousercuit (Member # 3235) on :
The crit is in the mail.
Posted by Silver3 (Member # 2174) on :
I'll read if you still need people. By now I probably owe you quite a few of these
(be warned, though, I've got a slew of job interviews which might interfere with my crit time)
Posted by Dude (Member # 1957) on :
Thanks for the offer Silver, but I think I have enough for this story. I'll have to catch you on the next go round.
Posted by Survivor (Member # 213) on :
I liked it, and would read more if I had time. The only thing that bugged me was that you had him swerving to avoid a guy doing forty-five during rush hour traffic while he was answering a phone. No matter what happens to him, it's less than he deserves for pulling a trick like that.
