This was written for a flash challenge at Liberty Hall. I'm not going to post all thirteen lines since the story is only 1,000 words, but I'm looking for readers for the whole thing. Thanks!
quote:Oil on Canvas
Her touch is ochre yellow. I tingle, feeling her brush slowly stroking me. I love her. Lover. Her every movement changes me; my surface cries out a reflection of her own desires.
Her touch is vermillion. I long for the brush to move again, the strokes to wet me. Each time I dry a different creation, more whole.
Posted by Gnomeinclaychair (Member # 2926) on :
Now that's downright sensual!
Flash writing might be suited to erotica. Pun intended.
Oh, and I'll read it if you like.
Posted by Paul-girtbooks (Member # 2799) on :
quote:Her touch is ochre yellow... Her touch is vermillion.
Terrific lines!
Sounds like a sensual version of David Morrell's short story "Orange is for Anguish, Blue for Insanity" (1989)
I'm intrigued... can I read it?
Posted by Survivor (Member # 213) on :
It's good, but I'm always a little scared of inanimate POV's. Probably works well in a flash, though.
Posted by autumnmuse (Member # 2136) on :
All right, you both have it.
I only needed a couple readers, so I'm good for now. Thanks again.
Posted by Beth (Member # 2192) on :
(Survivor, it worked really well in the first draft; I bet it's amazing now.)
Posted by autumnmuse (Member # 2136) on :
Awww, Beth, you're making me blush.
Posted by ThisProteanSoul (Member # 2882) on :
::Cries:: But I want to read it!
Oh well. I'll live. Somehow.
Really, it looks amazing. The sort of 'poetry within a story' that I adore, without making it thick or hard to understand. Beautiful.
Posted by autumnmuse (Member # 2136) on :
Well, okay, you can read it. I mean, how could I resist a plea such as 'poetry within a story'?
Posted by ThisProteanSoul (Member # 2882) on :
::Wins::
Posted by mikemunsil (Member # 2109) on :
It was good then, and I'm sure it'll be even better now. you should submit it to Shimmer, I think.
Posted by Beth (Member # 2192) on :
Autumn only submits to SFWA-eligible markets, Mike.
Posted by autumnmuse (Member # 2136) on :
Beth, I don't want to make you feel bad, though. I will probably broaden my market submissions once I've had a few pro sales.
But for me the first two years are pretty important, because I'd like to be eligible for the Campbell new writer award, which considers the first two years.
And, I'm so strapped financially that I'd rather make $100 than $10 from the same sale, so to be honest a large factor is purely mercenary. I view my writing as a business, and I want to make good business decisions.
And actually, a third reason is that I'm only eligible for WotF until I've had three sales. So I want to carefully choose who has my first three sales, before burning up my eligibility.
But I really like what small press has to offer, and I want to support them as much as I can. As soon as I can scrape together the cash, I plan to subscribe to Shimmer. I would ideally like to subscribe to all the good markets, but that will take finances I don't yet have, so I have to juggle. I already have five subscriptions, though, so I'm working on it! And you're next on the list.
I really hope Shimmer succeeds as a market. I know it deserves to.
Posted by ThisProteanSoul (Member # 2882) on :
SFWA?
Posted by Beth (Member # 2192) on :
I'm sorry, I didn't mean to sound cranky; I'm not at all! I just know that you have particular objectives and target particular markets - so suggesting that you submit to us is approximately like suggesting that I submit to F&SF - it just isn't going to happen.
and thanks for keeping us on the list. We appreciate it!
[This message has been edited by Beth (edited October 20, 2005).]
Posted by Paul-girtbooks (Member # 2799) on :
quote:SFWA?
Science Fiction Writers' Association, if I'm not mistaken.
Posted by autumnmuse (Member # 2136) on :
Yes, sorry, I meant to clarify. It actually stands for Science Fiction and Fantasy Writers of America. www.sfwa.org
I haven't decided for sure if I will apply for membership. But I'd like to be eligible in case I decide to.
[This message has been edited by autumnmuse (edited October 20, 2005).]
