I'm looking for a final round of crits on my utricide flash. Basically I want to make there isn't anything glaring that should be changed -- I am not looking to overhaul it.
----------------- Freddy Krueger Conquers the Scot Words: 980 Genre: Dark Humour ------------------
There are I times I get angry. Real angry. But to my credit, I’ve never done anything I might regret in the morning. I mean, it isn’t like I’ve killed anyone – yet. My new neighbour has me re-evaluating my position on frivolous, justifiable homicide.
Consider this. Every morning I get up and go to work. It’s early and I’m not a morning person. I don’t drink coffee and Coke just burns in my stomach if I drink it too early. So it is best if people just leave me alone until at least nine o’clock. I don’t think that’s asking too much. Finally, the weekend comes and I can sleep in. Finally, after five days of pre-dawn hell, I get a reprieve, a day where I can relax and get the sleep I need to recharge my batteries. It keeps me sane.
Posted by JOHN (Member # 1343) on :
johnlewisjr89@gmail.com
I'll take a look at it. I owe you a couple anyway.
Posted by wbriggs (Member # 2267) on :
I'll read.
Posted by LMermaid (Member # 2778) on :
I'm intrigued by both the opening and the title. I'd like to read the whole thing.
Posted by RobertM on :
You have a good voice. I was hooked enough to keep reading past the 13th line to be sure.