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Posted by kgator (Member # 2787) on :
 
I'm viewing this as a type of therapy, to figure out some things that have happened recently in my life....death, hurricanes, etc....so lets see what happens.

"The Hurricane"...that was the name, wasn't it? Or "The Storm"? She couldn't exactly remember the name or author of the poem. She had read it in her sixth grade reading book: one of the boring thousands she had been forced to read, analyze, and find the meter and rhyme: yet this one moved her to take notice, because it started with the idea that a hurricane came through the telephone. In the poem it ripped through the poet's apartment, and left only broken things wet from the rain for the poet to try and sort through. At the age of twelve she had no real connection to it; she had lived in some ways a charmed life; better than most and worse than some. The poem was filed away in a mental folder marked "school". Yet because of it's novelty it became permanent brain dandruff; destined to make appearances at dream functions and to materialize in bad weather. It wasn't until many years later that she understood what the poem really meant, and began to hate telephones.

[This message has been edited by kgator (edited August 12, 2005).]
 


Posted by Phrasingsmith (Member # 2773) on :
 
I'm curious to see where this story is going. I was confused a by the following:
" In th poem it ripped through the poet's apartment, and left only refuse and broken "

I perceived it at first to mean that the hurricane left the apartment, then refused to leave the apartment.

The continuity seems a bit disjointed in the sentence which follows the above.

Good Writing!

 


Posted by Beth (Member # 2192) on :
 
I think that's "refuse" as a noun, not a verb.


 


Posted by kgator (Member # 2787) on :
 
Thank you for the input. I saw what you meant by that akward line and I've edited abit.
 
Posted by LMermaid (Member # 2778) on :
 
I would love to read more of this if you don't mind emailing it to me. I'm at LMermaid@aol.com.
 
Posted by NewsBys (Member # 1950) on :
 
I'd like to read it too.
 


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