Today she wore a miniskirt and tight t-shirt. Today, she sported her raven hair in ponytails. Today, she strode right toward him.
Kev stood at attention. She leaned on a locker and winked. And inched closer. And closer. Then Stacey grabbed him by the shoulders. She pursed her glossed lips and leaned in for the kiss. I can't believe this is happening.
Yes, every boy dreamed of Stacey Keaton, but probably nobody more than Kevin Raleigh...
"Get up boy!" Dad had him by the shoulders. "Time to go fishin."
Posted by Netstorm2k (Member # 2279) on :
Evil, mean father you got there, Chris
Yeah, that concept has been done once or twice before. Easy to relate to, though. Perhaps change it up a bit: maybe have him dreaming a sweet little moment with Miss Stacy, get him a little excited, and then have him wake up in class..with Stacy Keaton giving him a strange look, since he said her name right as he woke up. "Stacy!"
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Posted by Survivor (Member # 213) on :
Do people really have dreams like this, though? I mean, dreams that could be mistaken for reality by any person in a normal waking mode of consciousness?
Posted by ChrisOwens (Member # 1955) on :
<I mean, dreams that could be mistaken for reality by any person in a normal waking mode of consciousness?>
I did try to throw in a few elements of strangeness, like everyone turning thier head at once. Also, a subtle hint that he can't get his lock open no matter what he does.
Some dreams in my teen years were very vivid and real. Less so nowadays.
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Posted by Survivor (Member # 213) on :
Vivid and "real", yes. But realistic?
Posted by JBSkaggs (Member # 2265) on :
Many people have dreams that they cannot distinguish from reality. For some the problem arises as which is real the dream or life?
the movie Brazil was a good example.
Posted by Netstorm2k (Member # 2279) on :
My ex-wife once had a dream that me and Tom Cruise were sticking needles in her. She woke up and started kicking me. She was still mad at me the next day.
I never asked if she was still mad at Tom Cruise.
It was a good hint that we weren't meant for each other.
Posted by MaryRobinette (Member # 1680) on :
quote:I did try to throw in a few elements of strangeness, like everyone turning thier head at once. Also, a subtle hint that he can't get his lock open no matter what he does.
These both sound like the way I viewed things in high school. I read them as good POV writing of a paranoid school kid, not as dream elements.
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Posted by ChrisOwens (Member # 1955) on :
Since a dream is cliche, I'm considering a different opening anyway.
Posted by HuntGod (Member # 2259) on :
Cliche' is not always bad, the reason something becomes cliched is often because it works :-)
I do like the idea of him daydreaming in class. Maybe have it start in class and he drifts off to sleep (obscuring the point where he drifts off) and then events unfold and he jerks awake looking like a spazz with her watching.
