Since the completed piece is only 750 words, I'm just going to post the first paragraph. The first line is fixed, based on The First Line Magazine requirements. Looking for readers for the whole thing.
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It was dark inside. That might not have been the most original way to describe being inside a turkey, but Meep thought it might be the most apt. Even the clammy smell of raw poultry could not compare to the darkness.
Posted by autumnmuse (Member # 2136) on :
I'll bite, since I'm not competing in this contest; send it on over.
Posted by djvdakota (Member # 2002) on :
Another clever beginning gleaned from a horrid First Line first line!
Sounds interesting, but I'm considering trying First Line, so I won't read. Not yet. Maybe later?
Posted by Christine (Member # 1646) on :
I'm game. Send it over. (I'm doing one too, but I don't mind reading other people's since I've got a clear idea where I'm going with mine by now.)
Posted by GZ (Member # 1374) on :
The actually line used as a first sentence is pretty bad. But as an idea generator -- great stuff. I've been playing around with four very different ideas on this one.
This version is just the one I've got an ending to.
Story on its way to those who've volunteered so far.
Posted by Survivor (Member # 213) on :
Oh....gross!
I have to read this, though.
Posted by NewsBys (Member # 1950) on :
I wanna read too. Sounds gruesome.
Posted by Robyn_Hood (Member # 2083) on :
I know you have a lot of readers already, and I don't know how much of a critique I can give you right now, but the title is enough to get me to bite. I keep going past it in the list and start giggling each time I read it.
