anyone care to read over about five pages (1600 words) from the intro I posted earlier (TOPIC: "stupid first lines" and "first lines second try") Its a rought first draft, just looking for comments on whether or not it seems to flow well and if it makes any sense to a reader who doesnt already have the rest of the story in his/her head.
thanks
-jon-
Posted by EricJamesStone (Member # 1681) on :
I was interested, so I'd be willing to take a look.
Posted by kinglear (Member # 1932) on :
thanks EJS, email is on its way
Posted by punahougirl84 (Member # 1731) on :
I liked it too - send it my way - I can handle about that length. WP if you have it, if not I'll manage. Good timing, as I just finished a rewrite myself!
punahougirl84@yahoo.com
Lee
Posted by kinglear (Member # 1932) on :
thanks punahougirl84, it's whizzing through cyberspace as I type this..
-jon-
Posted by Fahrion Kryptov (Member # 1544) on :
Me Too
use FahrionKryptov@yahoo.com
Posted by kinglear (Member # 1932) on :
got the message, its on its way kryptov.
-jon-
Edit: To anyone who's interested, I finished up the first chapter now so it is about double the length now for anyone who cares to read it and yell at me
[This message has been edited by kinglear (edited March 18, 2004).]
