Hatrack River Writers Workshop: Sci/Satire Short Story

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Posted by Phanto (Member # 1619) on :

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So there I was standing, in line for the happiness machine. You want me to tell you what they are? But surely you know about them. How very strange. Well, it's hard to describe, but I'll try. It's this metal cap that you put on your head, and it, well, makes you feel happy. Sort of like that old "drug"--is that what it was called?--cocaine. But it's not "addictive," at least according to MicroSpots, which means, I guess, that it's a lot better. Oh, and it costs money to use. But not too much.
So anyway, I was in line for a shot with this, when a really hairy old man pushed his way in front of me. I protested of course, but he decided to ignore me; very rude. I couldn't do anything else about it, so I just it be. But here's the strange part: this man he turned around and started talking to me.

A 4 page, science fiction/satire short story.
If you want to read more and edit it, contact me at yos@gis.net or post your email in thread.

Posted by Survivor (Member # 213) on :

Just a note on your intro there...it really does everything wrong...like so wrong, it kinda is funny...which I suppose is your aim. Just thought I'd let you know. I'm always up for a good laugh, so count me in.

Posted by Marianne (Member # 1546) on :

I wouldn't go so far as to say everything is so wrong...not enough of the story there to know its purpose...go ahead and send it to me and I will give it a look.

marlyn@tds.net

Posted by Jedi_Kyle (Member # 1805) on :

It's sounds pretty good so far. Will you send it to me too?