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Fantasy - 3100 words. I think this is ready to go out into the wide world. I would like second opinions.
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Maxwell Sanders pressed the phone closer to his ear as if that would somehow bring comprehension. "Did you say trolls?"
"Yes, Max." With her words, he could picture Amalia's rigid posture.
"Let me repeat what I just heard." He ran a hand over his scalp. "Trolls have shut down construction of the aluminum manufacturing plant and you want to redo the plans to appease them?"
"Yes, Max." In the silence, static hissed faintly on the line, reminding him that she was in Iceland. "I know what it sounds like, but eighty percent of the population here believe in fairies, elves, and trolls. So when the foreman tells me they won't continue working because we're intruding into troll territory I can't just ignore him."
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Hah! I remember this one. Came out of the first rewrite challenge, no? Don't ask for more opinions. Just submit it for publication. It'll sell.
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Actually, this isn't one of the rewrite challenges. This is one of the only short stories I managed to finish in four months in Iceland. Granted, I wrote a novel while I was there, but that only took one of the months.
Actually, mike, knowing that you deal with contractors and subcontracting and other things that dizzy my head, would you be willing to read this?
[This message has been edited by MaryRobinette (edited January 05, 2005).]
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I also work in construction and with contractors and subs as well. The business interaction represented in the story seemed fine to me. I think your story is ready to pub.
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Whew. Thanks, I had to research backhoes for this. It is harder to research contractor, client, subcontractor and employee dynamics/relations.
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I'm biting off on three in a row here, but I'd like to have a go, too. I've been wanting very much to participate more actively, and it is one of my Writing New Year's Resolutions after all. Posts: 151 | Registered: Sep 2004
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