Mostly, I want to know how to make the offset part look and feel like an adiot recording, complete with interruptions such as knocks on the door, moments of silence while the speaker collects his thoughts, etc.
Of course, you could try for a transcript format, but that might be more than a little dry. Basically it's:
Speaker 1: I love dogs.
Speaker 2: Cats rock. Dogs are dumb.
A knock on the door.
Speaker 2: Get that, will you?
Speaker 1: Sure, dog-hater.
***
Anyway, since you're character is listening to a recording, then the transcript thing is probably not the way to go (I just wanted to see how it looked, actually...)
Grace pressed play.
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"I love dogs," speaker one said.
"Cats rock. Dogs are dumb," speaker two said.
There was the sound of a knock on the door.
"Get that, will you?" speaker two said.
"Sure, dog-hater."
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Grace mulled over the import of that.
For example:
Ginny dried her eyes and sat down with Grandma Sally's journal.
#
Sally stared at the lights all around her. She didn't know there was this much electricity in the whole world and here it was at Coney Island, lighting up the gleeful chaos around her. She leaned in toward her latest beau.
[continue story of Karen then...]
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Ginny heard a noise and closed the journal.
...
Like I said, pretty mundane, but I've seen it and it's worked for me as a reader.
Forgot to add that I think it could be adapted rather easily for audio. I guess that goes without saying, but anyway...
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The record crackled as I set the turntable's badly worn needle on its grooved vynal surface.
"I love dogs," the first voice said.
"Cats rock. Dogs are dumb." another retorted, playfully. A knock sounded in the background with a muffled, scratchy thump.
"Get that, will you?" the second voice sighed.
"Sure, dog-hater." the first speaker shot back, his/her words drowned out by a grating hiss as the needle ran across a scar in the vynal.
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Or something like that. With this format, you wouldn't necessarily have to use a hard line break, though that'd be up to you. This format is a lot like the transmission/phone call setup I've seen in many genres.
Inkwell
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"The difference between a writer and someone who says they want to write is merely the width of a postage stamp."
-Anonymous
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JUDY: I ought to break your legs.
TOM: You're not breaking anybody's legs. Look at you. You're
in a wheelchair.
JUDY: And I have great upper body strength.
TOM: Honey, come on.
JUDY: Why'd you have to sleep with her?
TOM: It was nice to sleep with, I mean, somebody intact.
JUDY: You're a monster. Like Hitler or Stalin.
TOM: Did they have wives who were lousy in the sack too? I'm kidding. Honey, give me a break.
[sound of knocking]
TOM: That's her.
JUDY: How do you know who it is?
TOM: I invited her here.
JUDY: I ought to slice out your guts. Don't you dare let her in.
TOM: But, I mean, she's your sister.
[long silence]
TOM: She doesn't know you know.
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"It's.... What day is it? It's Tuesday. Dear Diary, I guess. It's Tuesday, April 25th and I'm, oh man, I'm all alone up here. Sometimes I get scared. Sometimes I think I hear people moving outside the cabin and I get scared, but I don't do anything. What could I do? I blow out the lamp and stay very still and hope it's not people, and if it is people, hope they ain't after me. It's probably just deer, or something. Maybe a fox. I don't know. But last night, I swear -- I swear I heard somebody talking. But it was just... I mean, if it was somebody talking, it sounded like he was talking to himself. I only heard one voice. Muffled. Couldn't make out the words. Freaks me out, let me change the subject for a minute. I'll come back to this.
"When I was a kid, I collected butterflies. My mom used to hassle me about this. One time she comes into my room and looks at all the butterflies I've got pinned to these boards.
"She goes, 'Sarah, can't you find something more productive to do with your time?'
"'Like what, mom, build a house?'
"'I worry about you, that's all.'
"'Worry about yourself.'"
Format it just like you did in your...um...third post. You can write the dialogue like spoken dialogue or in play format (like TL601's first post) -- that's up to you as the author.
Don't worry about italicizing...just make sure that the section that is the recording is completely underlined.
Anything beyond that, a publisher will take care of for you.
~Alethea
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