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Well, you imply that the water is what is fighting for first place, for one thing. Also, I'd take out 'the' from the phrase 'for the first place' for two reasons: first, it sounds better to simply say 'first place' and second, you use the same phrase right after that with 'for the most interesting'.
Edited to add: Perhaps the second part of the sentence would be clearer if you said something like 'full of fights for first place' instead of 'with its fights'.
My 2 cents.
[This message has been edited by autumnmuse (edited November 17, 2005).]
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Yeah, I wasn't sure of that "the" either. But my brain seems to switch to French at this hour of the night (it's 1:00 in Paris and I'm doggone tired). Thanks a lot!
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On the other hand, a stretch of water fighting desperately for first place would make for a most interesting spectacle!
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The desperate fight for first place over the last stretch of water made for a most interesting spectacle.
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