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Posted by Bob_Scopatz (Member # 1227) on :

A sonnet for Dana before the wedding

My love is like something read of in books
Some “How To” guidance for love-struck wretches
It’s all affirmations and leering looks
And deeply moving character sketches

Now that we finally have set a date,
I can admit some things I’d form’rly hid
Like what was really in that wooden crate
And why you should’ve stayed whereat I bid.

You see some things are best left to surprise
Unprepared was I for their unveiling
But now it’s time to open up your eyes
To reveal to you my one true failing:

to wit:

I own every book by Orson Scott Card
And to me he trumps the immortal bard.

<edit to fix to whit -- thanks intel3!!!> [Big Grin]

[ November 12, 2004, 10:50 PM: Message edited by: Bob_Scopatz ]

Posted by Bob_Scopatz (Member # 1227) on :

Oh look, there below! Room for your sonnets!

<insert sonnet siren song here>

Posted by Ben (Member # 6117) on :

Try to write it down into a perfect sonnet with one foolish line...

Posted by Intelligence3 (Member # 6944) on :

Bob, my lad, I am afraid that the saying is properly rendered "to wit."

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Posted by Bob_Scopatz (Member # 1227) on :

HA! even better if it is "to wit"

I was going to use that and then thought, no... it's really to whit.

LOL.

Posted by Intelligence3 (Member # 6944) on :

I have no life, you realize.

Posted by Bob_Scopatz (Member # 1227) on :

not a whit

Posted by Elizabeth (Member # 5218) on :

Wit ARE you talking about?

Posted by Intelligence3 (Member # 6944) on :

quote:
not a whit

Posted by dkw (Member # 3264) on :

I wrote this for a poetry class in the summer of 1999. I didn’t know I’d written it for Bob until last month when he told me that he thinks homemade hummus is “a turn on.” So tonight I dug through file drawers and found the portfolio from the class and this poem:

I'm Pounding Beans Into Paste Becasue I Love You

I know you've had an awful time today
I wanted to do something nice for you,
And homemade hummus isn't hard to make
Except it looks and smells like doggie doo.
I swore I'd never, ever cook a legume,
Until I fell for you I kept that vow,
I hate to think what laughter I'd encounter,
If my first Home Ec teacher saw me now.

I think your favorite food is so disgusting,
Tasteless and grainy, yet it's mushy too,
Except this love that's tugging on my heartstrings,
I can't think why I ever married you.
I loathe the fact that you have dreadful taste,
But since I love you I pound beans to paste.

[ November 12, 2004, 11:02 PM: Message edited by: dkw ]

Posted by Intelligence3 (Member # 6944) on :

/applause applause

Posted by Elizabeth (Member # 5218) on :

Ha ha! Oh my, you two were SO destined to be together, it is scary.

Posted by Elizabeth (Member # 5218) on :

"On Destined Lovers, Living Far Apart"

Her head was aching, fit to beat the band
She forgot to warm the water in the font
The screaming baby, baptised by her hand
Was thinking, "This just isn't what I want!
His feet burned in the barren Texas sand
As he tried to weed the fiercely dug-in plant.
By shrubbery he had become unmanned
And cried as if he were a cold infant.
Her arms were white, his face was very tanned
Her vegetation green while his was scant.
These latitudes they lived in were not planned
They longed for wedding vows she would incant.
For April, coming faster, they would scream
When both their worlds would melt into one dream.

[ November 13, 2004, 09:44 AM: Message edited by: Elizabeth ]

Posted by Bob_Scopatz (Member # 1227) on :

[Big Grin]

Wonderful!

Thanks Elizabeth.

[Wave]

Posted by dkw (Member # 3264) on :

Thanks Elizabeth! That is so cool. [Smile]

Posted by dkw (Member # 3264) on :

Bob pointed out that he has now written six love poems for me since we started dating, and the only one I’ve written for him I wrote before I’d ever met him. So:

For Bob

I didn’t know I’d been dreaming of you
Oh wait a minute – I hadn’t.
I didn’t know I was waiting for you
Oh wait a minute – I wasn’t.
I should have been, but who could have guessed
that someone so perfect existed?
Until that night when we both confessed
and the truth was no longer resisted.
I love you, I love you, and I’m longing for you
I’ll go nuts in a week more without you
You swept in, and we laughed, and you’ve stolen my heart
And if you don’t move to Iowa in the next seven days I swear I’m going to fly down next Sunday and drag you here myself.

Love,

Dana

Posted by Teshi (Member # 5024) on :

D is for destiny that's how it all starts
with good taste in books and similar mind
A is for arrow that pierces their hearts
(the cursor I mean not the pointy-end kind).
N is for nutcase, cause puns make us so:
you think that it's odd, a match most erroneous
yet A is for art, eye-lens Picasso;
madess and brilliance arrive silmultaneous.
B is for bills for the phone calls that try,
to cross many miles, for voices feel dearer
O is for overjoyed, the marriage is nigh,
a party for all, I wish I was nearer.
B is for both, together as one,
for ever and ever, a love not outdone.

Posted by dkw (Member # 3264) on :

[Smile]

Thanks Teshi!

You know, I don’t think when Bob invited you all to post your own poems that he meant they had to all be about us. [Blushing]

Posted by Teshi (Member # 5024) on :

I've never written a quasi sonnet before so I had to write one and the first line was in my head before I could stop it.

Nothing like writing a sonnet before breakfast.

Posted by Bob_Scopatz (Member # 1227) on :

[Kiss]

Dana

That was great. So, if I don't move, you'll come and get me, eh? Hmmm...sounds good. Bring boxes.

and tape.

Teshi, that was brilliant. [Big Grin]

And yes, I was hoping for more sonnets, not necessarily sonnets about us. [Blushing]

[ November 13, 2004, 01:20 PM: Message edited by: Bob_Scopatz ]

Posted by Intelligence3 (Member # 6944) on :

Get a room. [Big Grin]

Posted by Bob_Scopatz (Member # 1227) on :

A room would be nice.

[ROFL]

Right now it's "his" and "hers" rooms and the two are 1000 miles apart

Posted by Ralphie (Member # 1565) on :

quote:

I'm Pounding Beans Into Paste Becasue I Love You

There's something about the fact that 'because' is misspelt that makes it even funnier.

Posted by Elizabeth (Member # 5218) on :

Bob and Dana,
Sorry, but it was too easy to write a sonnet about you.
I just got this image of the two of you, one in Iowa, one in Texas, just waiting and daydreaming until your big day. And I thought of how sad Bob was when he got a divorce, compared to how happy is now.
But the thing that made it all so beautiful was thinking of the line: "I'm pounding beans into paste because I love you." Now that is a couple destined to be together, because it sounded SO Bob, yet so dkw, but certainly like no one else.

I just want to make it clear that my image of the two of you was undefined. I had to add in cold baptisms and crying yard workers to make it rhyme. ha ha.

Liz

Posted by Bob_Scopatz (Member # 1227) on :

bump.

Need more sonnets...

Posted by Teshi (Member # 5024) on :

Would write a sonnet
But I am stuck on haiku
Sorry about that.

[Big Grin]

Posted by Bob_Scopatz (Member # 1227) on :

[ROFL]